A troubled mind's chronicle
5/19/09
He woke up like a normal day
Bad mood yeah, but that wasn't strange
lately he's been that way
Senseless thoughts troubled his mind lately
He got dressed and went down the stairs
Raised his left arm and looked at his clock
11:09 a.m. So late
He pushed the button of the coffee machine
He had to do some things, but needed that extra pump of energy
The button didn't shine, strange...
He turned on the lights, nothing happened
Such a windy day.. probably a problem with electricity
So, he prepared everything to have a green tea
breakfast is of the essence..
He started to make some toasts
Found the bread, opened the first shelve
Saw his favourite knife
Cold, hard, sharp.. he felt it in his fingers
Suddenly a dark thought came to his mind
One of the most forbidden sins
Suddenly he craved for blood
Not any blood, human blood
Not his blood, not particularly someone's blood
Any blood would satisfy that desire
He grabbed his favourite knife, put on his coat and went outside
Windy day... like there could be another way.. and started walking
Not even a soul was wandering...
he put on his headphones and turned on his mp3 player
A normal day... The beggining of the end
He turned right to face the bus stop
And there she was, he didn't know her
But her blonde hair, ocean blue eyes, slender figure..
Gorgeous, Beautiful, Perfect... so bad she had to....
He smiled at her and said hello
"Do you know what day it is?"
"Tuesday, why?"
"Yes, it's tuesday, but also.. it's the day you die.."
He grabbed his favourite knife and stabbed her
Tossed his headphones, he needed to hear her screams
An adrenaline rush went through him.. he knew what he had to do next
She could scream, she could ask for help, not for long
There, bleeding, lying on the floor, fighting for oxygen she was
Not for long..
He grabbed his favourite knife and stabbed through her lungs
Now she couldn't breath, struggling for some air she looked at him
Desperate eyes begging for mercy, she didn't want to be saved
she knew it was impossible
All she wanted was to know why
He saw her and another emotion went through his head
He put his arm under her head, and kissed her bloody red lips
"Perfect..."
He went back to his home, tossed his coat on the couch
washed his favourite knife and put out the fire, water boiling by now
He drank his green tea, put on his favourite music and started to do his homework
Like any normal day
Not the slightest show of remorse in his face
At night his parents turned on the TV, in the news they showed the girl
Beautiful, Gorgeous, Perfect... murdered
The police said she had been like that for half an hour before she passed away
The police said that whoever had done this, was obviously a proffesional
The polce said they had no clue at all of who could've possibly done this..
His parents said he should be carefull, it happened only two blocks from his house
He smiled at them.. "I'll be carefull, don't worry" and went to sleep
In the morning he woke up
Sun was shining brightly, he opened his window and said
"What a beautiful day... to take someone's life"
It was the beggining of the end
He went down the stairs, turned on his coffee machine
And grabbed his favourite kinfe
Like any normal day....
WOW Mauro!!!
La historia está simplemente ESPECTACULAR!!!
Algunas correcciones...
Primero que nada... Todas las palabras del título deberían aparecer en mayúscula, es decir, debería leer: "A Troubled Mind's Chronicle".
Segundo... "I woke up like a normal day" es incorrecto... Uno no se levanta como un día normal, sino como EN un día normal, verdad? jajaja
Entonces la frase debería leer "I woke up like ON a normal day".
Más adelante dice "Found the bread, opened the first shelve..."
El error es que te dejaste influenciar por la forma en que se escribe la palabra en plural (shelves)... Pero no olvides que en singular es SHELF. =)
"Cold, hard, sharp… he felt it in his fingers".
IN his fingers? Supongo que quisiste decir que sintió al cuchillo SOBRE sus dedos, no dentro de ellos... jejeje... Por lo tanto: "He felt it ON his fingers".
"A normal day... the beggining of the end..."
Típico error de spelling... La palabra correcta es BEGINNING, con doble N.
"Now she couldn't breath, struggling for some air she looked at him"...
Acá el problema es que BREATH es un sustantivo que significa "aliento"... Lo que necesitamos en realidad es el verbo "BREATHE".
"The police said that whoever had done this, was obviously a proffesional”.
Otro error de spelling... La palabra correcta es "Professional", doble S. =)